Sunday, 22 July 2012

Meaning






a decade old...
this story has more pain
than love or care

the protagonist
tries to find meaning in
each passing breath



(Edited)
Written for Haiku Heights

43 comments:

  1. A hope is a lifetime yearning. Hope keeps it alive. Life has lots of meaning in whatever situation. Nice thoughts, Vaishali!

    Hank

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    1. Thank you, Hank, for the beautiful words. I remember falling in love with Stephen King's words on Hope in Shawshank Redemption.

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  2. We have nothing we we do not have hope. And, yes, keep the faith!

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    1. Agree, Mary! Hope is, indeed, one of the best things of life.

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  3. Sadness and grief always lurk like a shadow, but hope makes that black train bearable.

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  4. What a lovely Haiku, and you said you need to learn writing it? The words resonate with emotions so perfectly .... Great work :-)

    Also, I will become a follower of your blog so that I can get news feeds of your recent posts :-)

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    1. Thanks SO SO much! I'm over the moon with this comment of yours. I still think I need to improve a lot in writing haiku but to know it's appreciated is always a treat. Feels good... Thanks a ton! :)

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  5. We should have always hope...:) Hope she gets the care she wants...

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  6. Without adversity, there is no progress - though that journey feels like walking with a thorn in your feet. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

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    1. "though that journey feels like walking with a thorn in your feet." --- Absolutely agree with you, Gordon!

      Nicely said, too! :)

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  7. Very powerful. Joseph Campbell said life doesn't have inherent meaning... we bring the meaning to it. I find that idea helpful at times.

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    1. Thanks for sharing his thoughts, Serena. This has been said in different ways by different people and that just goes on to tell about the truth behind this thought.

      Thanks for appreciating, too. :)

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  8. A tough question. We on the outside, would surely answer yes to such a question. However, for one going through such pain, it is hard for us to imagine truly what their view of hope would be. A thought provoking read - thanks for sharing it.

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    1. Thank you, Sir, for understanding and appreciating the thought. A sure shot answer is 'yes' but even if it's too difficult to hope for the better, one must not stop believing. Life without hope isn't life at all.

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  9. One must always have hope.......well written haiku.

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  10. Nice reflections ~

    As to the poetry form itself, I think it would be more effective if you capture a clear example instead of asking generic questions on meaning of life ~ If you will permit me,

    she longs for the care,
    as pink and red garden blooms
    thirst for the raindrops

    Hope you don't mind ~

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    1. I am forever grateful to you, Grace. I'm learning and anyone who tells me that I can get better and shows me how, is a teacher.

      This was my second haiku and while reading others' haiku on 'Meaning', I was like, "Dude! I have to improve a lot... this ain't easy."

      In fact, in my first haiku, I goofed up thinking it was 7-5-7 syllable form and was corrected by yet another kind teacher.

      And, wow, the visual is beautiful. I can feel her yearning with the example you've put here, Grace.

      Thanks SO much! :) Please feel free to suggest corrections in future. I won't mind, I promise! :)

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  11. YES. YES. She has survived 9 years! Do not waste a life!
    Should I say more?
    I want more about her--not facts--human touches. Unless no one knows anything--not even the narrator. Tragedy. But she holds a dandelion! What do you suppose she sees or feels?

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    1. Ahh, Susan! That got me thinking. And I had better words to frame for her than I actually did in the haiku. Thanks so much for the positive feedback. :)

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  12. We must always keep and cling to hope. Without it life is quite miserable. Keeping faith aids hope:)

    Eileen

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  13. I like Grace's suggestion. You have asked the hard question. Now to make the question hold the seed of an answer.....a difficult goal, in poetry, eh?

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    1. Why, well, thank you, Rhonda! :) Does me good, the suggestions.

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    1. Aww Sreeja! You read even when you're not keeping well? Thanks so much! :)

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  15. I loved that.. The 1st one is too good

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    1. Thanks! :)

      I was about to make it 'Thanks, Loco' but then I realized the Spanish meaning I read, on your blog, of the term. :D :P

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    1. Yours is a thought-provoking haiku. I too liked the question format of it. Beautiful! :)

      Tried commenting on your site. It's not getting processed for now. :(

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  17. You did good..I wonder who the 'she' is..could it be you?

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    1. Thanks, Katy! Ah, well, she's my protagonist for this poem. :) :)

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  18. i really don't know how but you portrayed my emotions so well here....my haiku is very similar to this...and my question is same...when there is no faith is there a meaning to hope??

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    1. Thanks for appreciating, Tweety! Ditto for your haiku. :)

      And hey... when you look at, "when there is no faith is there a meaning to hope," do you see these can also be the first two lines of a haiku? :)

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  19. Yeah..hope is the answer for pain and rejection..never lose it..treasure it..nice haiku :)

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  20. When life seems tragic, I think she can look back at how she survived. The path, the journey over years, would bring her happiness perhaps.

    I hope your WP commenting problem is solved.

    Do leave your thoughts for my two haiku posts, the second has been written just now, after reading yours.. Got me thinking.

    Cheers.

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    1. Really, Leo, I am honored to know that my question inspired a haiku from you. And yes the WP commenting problem is solved... thanks to you. I'd like to make a short post of your answer on my blog. :)

      Thank you!

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  21. Wow.
    That really sounded from deep within you.
    Im sure Meaning was not just a poem from an idea or a sight.

    I always believe that a blogger's articles reflect their inner mind.
    I am following your blog because I share similar thoughts, perhaps more seriously!

    P.S. It was very good. :)

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    1. Thanks a ton, Aravind! It was great to have your thoughts on the poem.

      The poem was my protagonist's story. But yes, I agree, "a blogger's articles reflect their inner mind."

      Thanks for appreciating! :)

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