Saturday, 28 July 2012

Forget me not


                                                                  Courtesy



bloom withers
sooner or later –
scent lingers.




54 comments:

  1. woww this is so sweet.....

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  2. Your lines are so full of the vivid scent of reality ... they draw the readers in their own world ... you are an amazing writer ... love your posts :-)

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    1. WOW! You are being too kind, Amrit. But, really, thanks! That means a lot! :)

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  3. Very well done...short and crisp image ~

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  4. Very beautiful haiku with great meaning!

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  5. Wonderful ~ love the meaning of your words ~~ thanks, namaste, (A Creative Harbor)

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  6. from fresh floral to potpourri. life cycle. lovely.

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    1. p.s. I found the syllable error and fixed it. Thank you!

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  7. clean. crisp. precise. yet touching and deep. awesome!!

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  8. the scent, and the memory of beauty lost......images are painted so well with such minimal words...

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    1. Thanks, Joanne! Glad you liked it. :)

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  9. I love the message of the poem. :-)

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  10. I don't think that there is a sense of loss as long as the fragrance lingers. Sometimes we are able to keep things alive just as long as we want to. I like the idealistic thought and the passion in this. :)

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    1. True, Archana! As long as the memories are alive in our hearts and we let the sparks speak to us, there is no such thing as loss. Thanks for appreciating. :)

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  11. Hi Vaishali! :)
    You would be happy to know I have composed a poem on your say on ''Forget -Me -Not'' theme. Thank you so much for the sweet suggestion :)

    Hope you like :)
    http://myfriendshipsimran.blogspot.in/2012/07/allusion-in-silence.html#.UBVQoLRo20s

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    1. Simran, it's nice of you to give me some credit of it. But really, I'm glad you worked on the suggestion. Keep writing, my friend! :)

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    2. Also, your poem is really romantic... like feelings of a lover written down on paper.

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  12. First time here,nice read.

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  13. A beautiful thought, Vaishali.. and a lovely message in it as well.

    Perhaps, a little too much punctuation...?

    bloom withers
    sooner or later -
    scent lingers

    would get a tone of reading to it perhaps.. reading the first two lines in one go, and concluding with the emphatic third :)

    Nothing taken from the beauty of your thought though.. as MMT says, it is the scent that lingers :)

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    1. Perhaps, yes! Got your point, Leo, and it makes sense. Thanks for the suggestion... does me good! I'm here to learn and it's always good to have seniors give constructive feedback. Thanks! :)

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