Tuesday, 17 July 2012

Here I am

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In the skyscraper of sins,
Here I am,
Smoking like a chimney.

In the downpour of doubts,
Here I am,
Living another mystery.

In the circus of nonsense,
Here I am,
Yawning away the ennui.

In the enigma of beliefs,
Here I am,
Burning down the blasphemy.

In the ocean of wisdom,
Here I am,
Erasing my own history.


Copyright © 2012 Vaishali Jain


Written for Mag 126 and Vice Versa - #7


This poem has been published in a poem anthology, Convergence: A Global Collection of Poetry.

40 comments:

  1. so here comes (again) ur very own n old writing style i.e. dark n painful realities...bt indeed it is beautifully dark(n short fr ur style)..plus d usage of d very right words make it more amazing!!keep it up sis :)

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    1. lol babes! I still write disheartened and dark stuff, it's just that they are locked inside the pages of my diary. They would never see the light of this world - the world that needs some positivity.

      Hell, okay, keeping my sanity, I'd say, thank you for appreciating and I am SO SO SO glad that you called it as "beautifully dark" :)

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  2. Cool write! Has a great rhythm.

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  3. Amazing poetry and beautiful rhymes!!!

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    1. Thank you, Laxmi! Glad you liked it. :)

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  4. Very nice VJ..the last stanza is my fav.....really very very good....

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    1. Aww thank you SO SO much, Sreeja! Enjoy! ;)

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  5. I really enjoyed the 'here I am' theme running through your poem. Nice.

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    1. Thanks for appreciating the rhythm, Helen! :) Have a good day.

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  6. We live and, hopefully we learn from our mistakes. I hope this person knows her true worth :) It sounds so sad, to me.

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    1. That's very kind of you to care for a character. Thanks for sharing your feeling. :)

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  7. The second last stanza is my favorite. I like the idea of burning down one's own blasphemy. Even recognizing one's own blasphemy is hard, I think.

    (Thanks for taking part in Vice/Versa! Nice to have you there!)

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    1. Thank you, Mary, for appreciating the words! It is good to know what is liked in the poem.

      I'll be at Vice Versa...again and again and again! ;)

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  8. very nice lines.... i had written so much but thanks to blogger.com..everything vanished ... :) yet the lines are mirror for almost all of us ! very nice poem !

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    1. I'm sorry it got all erased but thanks for typing it up again. Nice of you to do so. :) :)

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  9. I especially like "skyscraper of sins"...well done...

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  10. Lovely! I want to discover that ocean of wisdom...and float about for a while!

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    1. Thanks, Karen! Have a great and enlightening day. :)

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  11. I like how you made it to the last stanza from the first... a feeling almost dark and hopeless of sin to "In the ocean of wisdom,/Here I am,/Erasing my own history. Well done.

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    1. Glad you liked it, Serena! Thanks for appreciating. :)

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  12. Nice lines vaishali...
    Thanx for landing in my world :)
    Come again :)

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  13. Very powerful piece. In erasing our own history, we permit ourselves not to repeat it :)

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    1. Exactly! Thank you for visiting and leaving your thoughts. :)

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  14. so sad and too often true, the erasing of one's own history.

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    1. Yes, Victoria! It is!

      Thank you.. :)

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  15. Thank you for letting me know that you didn't see the word 'doubt' in my poem. You were right, it wasn't there. It had been originally, but in a revision I must have removed it. It IS there now, thanks to your sharp eyes and willingness to mention it!

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    1. Anytime, Mary! And I checked your poem again... an intelligent use of the word. :)

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  16. "In the skyscraper of sins,
    Here I am,
    Smoking like a chimney"

    This aptly describes the situation for most people. We're not short of committing sins. Sadly many of us continue to do so even though being made aware. Thoughtful haiku, Vaishali!


    Hank

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    1. Totally agree with your words, Hank! And thank you so much for appreciating. Was it a haiku? I didn't try to make it so. Would have been co-incidental. :)

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  17. Really nice, I liked the way you weaved the various emotions here.

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  18. I like the way you put a new twist on smoking like a chimney in the stanza. Annette at http://hoofprintsinmygarden.wordpress.com/2012/07/20/the-leap/

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  19. :) Nice

    "Here I am
    A grain of sand
    On the shores of Universe!"

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    1. And that's a great one! Too true! Thank you for letting me in your thoughts too. :)

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