Thursday, 16 August 2012

A unique choice...


Eerie boulevard
Blighted curtains
Beat my stance

A shadow harkens
Borrowing mystery
Condemning the night

I, a broken vagrant
He, an ordinary mystic
Moonless flicker

The substance arises
Blinding green
Deceitful rhythm

Life on wager
Praise the dark
Or fade to naught

Bloating pressure
A unique choice...
Marred by blood


Written for Three Word Wednesday where the words were Beat, Pressure & Substance 
And Poets United: Vice Versa where the words were Unique/Ordinary & Condemn/Praise

34 comments:

  1. The darkness in this poem is definitely palpable. Good use of worlds from both prompts.

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  2. Like a loving vampire. It's a dark and mysterious poem.

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    1. Mysterious, it is! :D Thank you, Alice! Waiting for the next part of your story. :)

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  3. "Eerie" indeed. What strange characters meet in the dark!! Well done.

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    1. Dark is in, no? :D Thanks for stopping by!

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  4. Mysterious and brilliant....great choice of words.....

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  5. Deeep and exotic piece, Vaishali...mesmerized :)

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    1. Glad you liked it so, Panchali! Thank you! :)

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  6. wow and you took those three words and made a poem .. OH MY GOD moment for me I must say ..

    beautifully woven

    Bikram's

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    1. Haha Thanks, Bikram! Quite nice to hear that from you! :D

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  7. That is quite a feat: combining two word memes and make it seem natural. I find just four words difficult. Well done.

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    1. Thank you so much, Aprille! I'm trying to learn from lovely writers such as you. :)

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    1. Haha! :P Couldn't be anything but that... Thanks, Jaish! :)

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  9. Again and again and again ... each of your poems are so powerful and full of emotions ... the words come alive with your expressions ... loved this one ... you are really awesome Vaishali :-)

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    1. *smiles* Thanks so very much, Amrit! Am I over the moon, or what?! :D A supercool feedback! :)

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  10. Yes, there is a great weight and mystery behind these words..the choice of words and almost faltering rhythm add to the emotion..jae

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    1. Thanks so much, Jae! Nice to hear from you! :)

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  11. The moment I read the first one, an image of a lady standing by her curtains came to my mind, don't know why?

    Beautiful writing, third one is superb!

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  12. Ah...the choice, Dark or light...good or evil... you've captured them well here. Fabulous imagery.

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    1. So glad to hear that! Thanks a ton, Bren! :)

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  13. Awesome! ...brilliance in darkness! ...the 3rd one is outstanding:)

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    1. Thanks so very much, Amit! Glad you liked it so! :)

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  14. grey shaded and mysterious , well written -superb work vaishali - loved it

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    1. Thank you, Vinisha! I guess, the overall rating on this post is "Mysterious!" :D Glad!

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  15. The words are creating a picture of darkness here.Lovely post indeed.

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  16. Powerful! And what a challenging choice of words...you met the challenge very well:>)

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