Thursday, 16 August 2012
A unique choice...
Eerie boulevard
Blighted curtains
Beat my stance
A shadow harkens
Borrowing mystery
Condemning the night
I, a broken vagrant
He, an ordinary mystic
Moonless flicker
The substance arises
Blinding green
Deceitful rhythm
Life on wager
Praise the dark
Or fade to naught
Bloating pressure
A unique choice...
Marred by blood
Written for Three Word Wednesday where the words were Beat, Pressure & Substance
And Poets United: Vice Versa where the words were Unique/Ordinary & Condemn/Praise
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The darkness in this poem is definitely palpable. Good use of worlds from both prompts.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Mary! :)
DeleteLike a loving vampire. It's a dark and mysterious poem.
ReplyDeleteMysterious, it is! :D Thank you, Alice! Waiting for the next part of your story. :)
Delete"Eerie" indeed. What strange characters meet in the dark!! Well done.
ReplyDeleteDark is in, no? :D Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteMysterious and brilliant....great choice of words.....
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Sreeja! :)
DeleteDark verse! Lovely!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot! :)
DeleteDeeep and exotic piece, Vaishali...mesmerized :)
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it so, Panchali! Thank you! :)
Deletewow and you took those three words and made a poem .. OH MY GOD moment for me I must say ..
ReplyDeletebeautifully woven
Bikram's
Haha Thanks, Bikram! Quite nice to hear that from you! :D
DeleteThat is quite a feat: combining two word memes and make it seem natural. I find just four words difficult. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Aprille! I'm trying to learn from lovely writers such as you. :)
DeleteDark!! :)
ReplyDeleteHaha! :P Couldn't be anything but that... Thanks, Jaish! :)
DeleteAgain and again and again ... each of your poems are so powerful and full of emotions ... the words come alive with your expressions ... loved this one ... you are really awesome Vaishali :-)
ReplyDelete*smiles* Thanks so very much, Amrit! Am I over the moon, or what?! :D A supercool feedback! :)
DeleteYes, there is a great weight and mystery behind these words..the choice of words and almost faltering rhythm add to the emotion..jae
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Jae! Nice to hear from you! :)
DeleteThe moment I read the first one, an image of a lady standing by her curtains came to my mind, don't know why?
ReplyDeleteBeautiful writing, third one is superb!
Wow! Well, thank you, Saru! :)
DeleteAh...the choice, Dark or light...good or evil... you've captured them well here. Fabulous imagery.
ReplyDeleteSo glad to hear that! Thanks a ton, Bren! :)
DeleteThanks, Rajesh! :)
ReplyDeleteAwesome! ...brilliance in darkness! ...the 3rd one is outstanding:)
ReplyDeleteThanks so very much, Amit! Glad you liked it so! :)
Deletegrey shaded and mysterious , well written -superb work vaishali - loved it
ReplyDeleteThank you, Vinisha! I guess, the overall rating on this post is "Mysterious!" :D Glad!
DeleteThe words are creating a picture of darkness here.Lovely post indeed.
ReplyDeletePowerful! And what a challenging choice of words...you met the challenge very well:>)
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