Saturday 23 March 2013

Fortitude



she sings in broken chords
to engross her small brother…
Mama won’t return




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27 comments:

  1. I pictured a young girl with flowing wavy hair, dry throat singing to her baby brother with broken voice as she consoles him - sad but beautiful.

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  2. oh goodness...that last line is a zinger...and i imagine her trying to sooth her sibling even knowing the truth of what is to come in life...powerful haiku...

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  3. You paint a tender and dramatic image with this haiku. There is sadness but tremendous fortitude in the big sister. Beautifully written.

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  4. You made my eyes well... I am touched by the image in this haiku...Thank You..
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    RS

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  5. Oh why would mama not return..now you have me all emotional

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  6. Ahh ... this touched my heart Vaishali ... you painted a beautiful picture of love between siblings, and the loss they experienced together as well ... very sad :-(

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  7. your words are full of such emotion... very intense, dramatic image you created here!

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  8. Kind of put me back in my seat for a moment. So much said with so few words. Nice job.

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  9. Aw:( you've got me there. Very sad but fortitude is there.

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  10. Awesome.Short and very touching...
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  11. Ghosh! It touches a chord in my heart.

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  12. Grabbed me by the heart and shook me good. Alice

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  13. Touching! Last line evokes very tragic emotions.

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  14. Clever and moving. Great haiku!

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  15. subtle and intense. this haiku is amazing actually, the prompt perfectly used. they are devastated, and yet the elder one knew it was already time to rebuild. Lovely.
    Beauty, Glory, Joy, Pain & Fortitude.

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  16. Sadly, sometimes one has to take on an adult role for a trying time! Nicely Vaishali

    Hank

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  17. very touching haiku...GOD<3U

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  18. Painful! And the best part is reader can interpret it in many ways.

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  19. Powerful in such few words! It was so good to see you stop by catnip. Hope all is well with you and have a wonderful weekend!

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  20. :'( Happy Mother's Day to you, my dear one. :)

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